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Spidery Legs by ~yeatsgrave:iconyeatsgrave:



your words are like stars which glimmer and gleam
which I read through and study, and hold to the book
the stars, and your words, since the day I was born
were fixed to determine my fate
I would try so hard to bind your image
to my fingers, like spindly spidery legs
they click and they clack and they click and they clack
dance in a whirling treadmill of a dance
if your image I had, and not an idea, a wish, a thought
if pictures, if pictures in spidery webs
my fingers, if pictures, could draw! and not thoughts
©2008 ~yeatsgrave
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I'm actually trying to move away from meter here. It worked in two or three lines! See, look!

I just wrote a few short pieces today, thought I'd post a couple.

I think this came from the fact that I really need to work on imagery (I really really do)

and the fact that I'm reading Anansi Boys by Neil Gaiman, which is about a spider. So that's a big psychological influence on me, I guess!

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~demon-polecat:icondemon-polecat: Apr 24, 2008, 11:19:48 PM
Anansi Boys is amazing.

When I read this, it kept falling into a rhythm and then breaking it, which was pretty jarring XD I think it was to do with the long lines. But was that the intended effect?

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Sourire

is my current favourite word.