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The Rain by ~yeatsgrave:iconyeatsgrave:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Fixed


if a mortal would drink of the rain, all the rain
and he'd drink and he'd drink and he'd drink
he would bloat and he'd swell all in blubbery pain
and be a blobbery blubbery blop
drink only from a well that was built by a man
just to quench mortal thirst in a drought
since the rain's for the critters, for the lakes and the trees
but the man, it seems, gods have cast out
©2008 ~yeatsgrave
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Just something short and silly. I have noted the flaws in rhythm, but don't find them unbearable. But you can throw in two cents if you like.

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~TwilightLavender:iconTwilightLavender: Apr 25, 2008, 5:57:43 AM
Interesting thoughts you have here...

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"Falling slowly, eyes that know me
And I can't go back
Moods that take me and erase me
And I'm painted black" - Falling Slowly, Glen Hansard
~jerkgentry:iconjerkgentry: Apr 25, 2008, 11:23:16 AM
Line four is remeniscent of Shel Silverstein. I like it.

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Arsenic for the girls and boys.
~yeatsgrave:iconyeatsgrave: Apr 25, 2008, 7:57:51 PM
haha wow! I have a book about a rolling ... circle with a missing piece. I didn't know other people knew about that author, since I've never heard of them since. I'd forgotten about that book.
~jerkgentry:iconjerkgentry: Apr 28, 2008, 9:32:03 AM
He wrote some humourous poetry too. My favorite is "I am writing this poem from inside a lion, and it's rather dark in here". I think that's both the title and the first line.

That line about a bloppery blubbery blop just sounds like something he'd write. Maybe Dr. Seuss as well.

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Arsenic for the girls and boys.
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